Is my writing good enough for college?

It's a summary, and it's a fine summary at that. It's not too wordy, although you could have cut out a fair bit of this and made it more succinct. All the extra words make it seem like you're just trying to hit a word count, and not trying to make a real point. You're also going to need a more analytical approach when you write essays in college. As I said, this is a fine summary, but summarizing isn't going to make your professors happy. They've read the book too, and they're not looking for you to relay the contents in a new way. They want you to use the knowledge and information in the book to form an argument.